Ticket #520 (closed editorial: incorporated)
Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-httpbis-p2-semantics-24 with security considerations
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Document: draft-ietf-httpbis-p2-semantics-24 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: November 18, 2013 IETF LC End Date: End of November IESG Telechat date: (if known)
Summary: The document has a number of run-on sentences that should be fixed. I also found some security considerations that should be added to the document or referenced in other documents if they have been addressed.
Minor issues: Security Considerations
Section 9.3: You may want to include information that informs developers and users of SQL injection attacks. Fields are still included in some URIs that link you to pages directly that contain personal information using consistent identifiers. It would be helpful as this is still one of the biggest attack vectors. A quick search on SQL injection URL will provide additional information for inclusion in the write up. You mention GET-based forms in section 9.3, but it doesn't mention SQL injection attacks and information in the URIs. Since this is so prevalent still, I think it is important to call out explicitly.
+1 - SQL doesn't have anything to do with HTTP, and even though it is used often in conjunction with the protocol, it's an implementation-specific choice.
For example, I don't use any SQL on my Web site, and am very happy about that -- see http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/ietf-http-wg/2013OctDec/1154.html
Section 9.4: HTTP User-Agent strings are also used within enterprise at a firewall or by web servers to prevent the use of outdated browsers, ones with known security issues. Since this section informs of the negative uses, this one would be important to include to provide a broader picture of how they may be used in a security context.
User-agent strings are also used in threat detection as there may be a modification to a User-Agent string that helps incident response teams identify malware or comprised browsers.
Jari: On the Section 9.4 issue I understand the raised concern, but reading the text I think the current text is fine. http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/ietf-http-wg/2013OctDec/1898.html
Section 9 should also cover Man-in-the-middle and session hijacking attacks or point to a security consideration section that covers transport security considerations (authentication, encryption, logging, etc.). If that is covered in another document, please state that and provide a link. It would be worth including a reference within the introduction of 9 to Part 1 on Messaging Security Considerations, draft-ietf-httpbis-p1-messaging-17 as well. - see 
Section 1, second sentence: No comma necessary before "via"
HTTP provides a uniform interface for interacting with a resource (Section 2), regardless of its type, nature, or implementation via the manipulation and transfer of representations
Section 3, paragraph 1, consider breaking the first sentence into two.
Second paragraph, break into multiple sentences.
Section 220.127.116.11: Remove unnecessary comma after parse, change from:
An HTTP sender MAY generate, and a recipient MUST be able to parse, line breaks in text media that consist of CRLF, bare CR, or bare LF.
An HTTP sender MAY generate, and a recipient MUST be able to parse line breaks in text media that consist of CRLF, bare CR, or bare LF.
Section 18.104.22.168 Break #4 down into multiple sentences or a structure that is easier to parse.
Section 22.214.171.124: Several sentences are way too long, please consider breaking them into multiple sentences.
Section 3.3, paragraph 2, Break the second sentence into multiple sentences. This could be listed as two examples without the comparison statement.
Section 3.4, last sentence, While I appreciate the reference and found it humorous, this reference may not be easily understood by an international audience. I suggest that you explain the recommendation in plain text, followed by the reference to reach all audiences.
Section 3.4.1, please break the last sentence into multiple sentences.
Section 3.4.2, please break the second to last paragraph into multiple sentences.
Section 4 starts using the word ought. SHOULD would be more appropriate if that is what is intended as the statements refer to IANA actions and would be better read with well-defined terms.
Section 4.2.2, please break the second to last sentence into multiple sentences.
Section 4.3.4, several run-on sentences should be broken into multiple sentences.
Section 4.3.5, please break the 3rd to last paragraph into multiple sentences.
Second to last and the last paragraph on page 35 should be broken into multiple sentences.
Note at end of page 38 should be broken into multiple sentences.
Last sentence on page 42 should be broken into multiple sentences.
Section 6.3.1, remove carriage return after "The" in first line.
(Formatting issue that already has been fixed)
Last sentence of page 53, please break into multiple sentences.
6.4.1. First sentence should be broken into a couple.
6.4.4 Use of word 'ought' sounds odd in this sentence:
In order to satisfy the original request, a user agent ought to perform a retrieval request using the Location URI (a GET or HEAD request if using HTTP), which can itself be redirected further, and present the eventual result as an answer to the original request.
How about this instead:
In order to satisfy the original request, a user agent can perform a retrieval request using the Location URI (a GET or HEAD request if using HTTP), which can itself be redirected further, and present the eventual result as an answer to the original request.
Section 7.1.4: Please break the first sentence of the second and last paragraphs into multiple sentences.
Section 9.6 has a few run-on sentences, please break them up -- First sentence of 4th paragraph for instance.
Last paragraph: I'd like to see a SHOULD in the first sentence to make this stronger, otherwise, there is no hope it will happen. I'm not even sure how the user could be informed of loss of privacy considerations if it is not built in, this is a tough approach and I don't see it being effective for most users. If this is configurable at the time of browser installation, would you recommend that there is a series of prompts that inform the user about each choice or did you have something else in mind? An example may help here to actually see something happen as a result of the recommendation.
- Severity changed from In IETF LC to In IESG Evaluation
- Milestone changed from unassigned to 26
- Type changed from design to editorial
- Description modified (diff)
- Status changed from new to closed
- Resolution set to incorporated